MBA Admissions Consulting
MBA | Admissions Essay - Sample Essay One
Client Admitted to Duke Fuqua Class '11 MBA | Admissions Essay - Sample Essay Two
Client Admitted to Stanford GSB Class of '12 MBA | Admissions Essay - Sample Essay Three
Client Admitted to Harvard Business School Class of '11
Law School Admissions
LAW | Personal Statement - Sample Essay One
Client Admitted to Columbia Law School, Class of '12 LAW | Personal Statement - Sample Essay Two
Client Admitted to USC Law Class of '12 LAW | Personal Statement - Sample Essay Three
Client Admitted to UCLA Law, Class of '13
Medical School Admissions
MED RESIDENCY | Personal Statement - Sample Essay One
Client Admitted to Surgery Residency (NY), Class of '14 MEDICAL | Primary Statement - Sample Essay Two
Client admitted to UC Davis Medical School, Class of '12 MEDICAL | Primary Statement - Sample Essay One
Client Admitted to UCLA School of Medicine Class of '12
UNDERGRADUATE | Common Application Statement - Sample Essay Two
Client Admitted to Harvard College, Class of '13 UNDERGRADUATE | School Specific Statement - Sample Essay One
Client Admitted to Georgetown, Class of '13 UNDERGRADUATE | Personal Statement - Sample Essay Three
Client Admitted to UCLA Class of '13
Graduate School Admissions
MASTERS | Personal Statement - Sample Essay One
Client Admitted to MIT Engineering Masters Program Class of '11 MASTERS | Personal Statement - Sample Essay Two
Client Admitted to Columbia - SIPA Program Class of '11 MASTERS | Personal Statement - Sample Essay Three
Client admitted to Oxford, Class of '12
Dental & Pharmacy Admissions
DENTAL | Personal Statement - Sample Essay One
Client Admitted to Tufts Dental Program Class of '13 DENTAL | Personal Statement - Sample Essay Two
Client Admitted to NYU Dental School '13 PHARMACY | Personal Statement - Sample Essay
Client Admitted to USC Pharmacy School Class of '13 NURSING | Admissions Statement - Sample Essay
Client Admitted to Children’s Hospital of Michigan Resident Nursing Program Class of '11
Helpful tips and advice for drafting a compelling personal statement when applying for graduate admission
What does this statement need to accomplish?
The personal statement should give concrete evidence of your promise as a member of the academic community, giving the committee an image of you as a person.
This is also where you represent your potential to bring to your academic career a critical perspective rooted in a non-traditional educational background, or your understanding of the experiences of groups historically under-represented in higher education and your commitment to increase participation by a diverse population in higher education.
What kinds of content belongs here?
Anything that can give reviewers a sense of you as a person belongs here; you can repeat information about your experiences in your research statement, but any experiences that show your promise, initiative, and ability to persevere despite obstacles belongs here. This is also a good place to display your communication skills and discuss your ability to maximize effective collaboration with a diverse cross-section of the academic community. If you have faced any obstacles or barriers in your education, sharing those experiences serves both for the selection process, and for your nomination for fellowships. If one part of your academic record is not ideal, due to challenges you faced in that particular area, this is where you can explain that, and direct reviewers’ attention to the evidence of your promise for higher education.
The basic message: your academic achievement despite challenges
It is especially helpful for admissions committees considering nominating you for fellowships for diversity if you discuss any or all of the following:
- Demonstrated significant academic achievement by overcoming barriers such as economic, social, or educational disadvantage;
- Potential to contribute to higher education through understanding the barriers facing women, domestic minorities, students with disabilities, and other members of groups underrepresented in higher education careers, as evidenced by life experiences and educational background. For example,,
- attendance at a minority serving institution;
- ability to articulate the barriers facing women and minorities in science and engineering fields;
- participation in higher education pipeline programs such as, UC Leads, or McNair Scholars;
- Academic service advancing equitable access to higher education for women and racial minorities in fields where they are underrepresented;
- Leadership experience among students from groups that have been historically underrepresented in higher education;
- Research interests focusing on underserved populations and understanding issues of racial or gender inequalities. For example,
- research that addresses issues such as race, gender, diversity, and inclusion;
- research that addresses health disparities, educational access and achievement, political engagement, economic justice, social mobility, civil and human rights, and other questions of interest to historically underrepresented groups;
- artistic expression and cultural production that reflects culturally diverse communities or voices not well represented in the arts and humanities.